Review Day Starts in 1 day Info

Family Matters

by lou5979

Published May 19, 2011

My family matters to me
My mom, my dad
Who are forever there
as for siblings i have three 1,2,3

My family matters to me
Big or small i love them all
Although my sister drives me crazy
I love her dearly even then she`s lazy!

My bro is funny just like a monkey,
He even thinks he`s a little hunky ;)
he drives me up the wall
But i always love it when he will call

Well as for cats i have two
even more than you!

My eldest sis is a twilight freak
she makes us watch it at least twice a week

My family matters to me
why cant they see how much they mean to me?

I love my family with all my heart
I need them close to me forever
And can`t be kept apart
To protect me and keep me safe
To care for me and not make me late!

Comments & reviews · 3
User avatar
lou5979 Comment
lou5979 commented Comment · May 19, 2011

thanks for commenting so soon I know about my terrible typing skills, I`m really not good at it plus I usually use texting typing not using proper grammar

User avatar
Yanni1995
Review
Yanni1995 wrote a review Review · May 19, 2011

This is a really humorous poem. I love that everything in this poem is pertaining for me. The meaning of this poem is really funny although I could find some grammatical errors.

My family matters to me
My mom, my dad
Who are forever there
as for siblings i have three 1,2,3 - this is a cute beginner.

My family matters to me
Big or small i love them all -I should be capitalized.
Although my sister drives me crazy
I love her dearly even then she`s lazy! - there doesn't need to be a space when you're putting an apostrophe

M
bro is funny just like a monkey, I think you mean 'my' and not just 'm'
He even thinks hes a little hunky ;) - You need an apostrophe here. "he's"
he drives me up the wall
But i always love it when he will call you need to capitalize the I
- And I also absolutely love this stanza.
Well as for cats i have two
even more than you!

M eldest sis is a twilight freak - are you sure you want to put only 'm'?
she makes us watch it at least twice a week

My family matters to me
why cant they see how much they mean to me?

I love my family with all my heart
I need them close to me forever
And can`t be kept apart - no need for the space in between the apostrophe and the letters.
To protect me and keep me safe
To care for me and not make me late! - I love the last two lines.


I really really like this poem especially what it means. So, besides those that I pointed out I think you would be set. You really should be careful with the capitalization of the pronoun I. Happy writing!



If you don't read the newspaper, you're uninformed. If you read the newspaper, you're misinformed.
— Mark Twain