If love is a place you fall into, where is it you're falling from
You're insecurities?
Perhaps,
but isn't that what love transcends?
So maybe...
The everyday?
This I pray
Is there hope in the mundane?
That a little chemistry will start a forest fire
That the embers will last long past the initial flame
And that they're colors won't fade into night
I want to fall into that inferno
Feel the embers warm a winter night.
Or maybe what we fall from is ourselves
The little things that drag us down
And we find, when we fall
all we really are
all that really matters
I wouldn't know
I want to know
so baby, will you teach me?
Will you tell me?
Baby, can you take me to that place
The place we fall into
When we fall into love...
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Interesting. The middle was the best in my opinion, because of imagery. There were a few part that were confusing, but they are easily fixable.
The beginning and end had a bit of a flow problem, but again, easily fixable.
I can't really see anything else. Poetry isn't exactly my forte. Maybe saying something like 'they always say...' etc.
PM me if you need anything.
*Seraph*