There once was a backpack named Lool
She was owned by a super huge fool
Since he had no money
and was such a dummy
He trashed her at the end of school.
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Um... well, this is kind of a weird thing for me to review (because I don't review poetry well), but here's a SHORT review:
1. Maybe a period at the end? I don't know if someone's mentioned this.
2. It's kind of awkward because you capitalize 'She' but don't capitalize 'and'. Maybe do,
"There was once a backpack named Lool,
She was owned by a super huge fool.
Since he had no money,
and was such a dummy,
he trashed her at the end of school."
I don't know, I'm no poetry expert!
Anyway, really funny poem.
Thank you! I will change it as soon as I can.
hey,
i'm glad i read your poem! it did really bring a smile on face and threw all my sadness that i had.
good job! keep it up!
hope to see more soon.
just to end -
keep dreaming! keep writing!
I'm glad it helped! Isn't that what writing is about? Bringing joy to people? In some cases at least. Anyway, I'm glad it brought a smile to your face and your comment did the same to me.
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Mmk, so can't exactly review my own piece (that I collaborated with you) but I have a couple nitpicks to the way you posted it XD.
1) I think there should be a period at the end, just to give it a sense of finality.
2) The capitalization is kind of irregular
ANYWAYSSSSS, WELCOME TO DEE SIGHT!!!!!!!!!!
That was really good
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I think you are complimenting me, but you might be being sarcastic XP