A light in the darkness.
It lights the ground,
It lights the nature all around.
The beauty of its naturalness.
It filled my heart,
right from the very start.
A light in the sky,
I will not lie,
It is so bright,
It is, my midnight light.
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Beautiful. While reading one can feel the charm of the Moon. One can feel it's affection on him. Really beautiful.
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Hello there! Jash here for a random, short review.
I have nothing to nitpick here, i.e. typos and such, but I do have a wee problem with the structure. I know this is poetry, but the way you've used the punctuations, and have inserted fragments were distracting.
For example:
...period.
And so on...
I suggest to delete those ending punctuations; they're unnecessary and just break the flow.
But set those aside, this was a very nice poem. =) I like the words that you used; they were simple.
Keep writing!
~ Jash ♥
Hey, Karr.
I really liked this and it was good. The only things I really have to say about it is this:
* Try spacing your stanzas or else the whole thing looks crowded. I put all I have to say in bold.
Now, I'm not sure about puncuationo in poems, I'm still working on that myself, but other than the little I had to say, I think this was really good.
Reise!
I think this is really good, I can't find anything wrong with it. My favorite part was the last two lines, being that I have always thought of the moon as my midnight light.
Beautiful. I thought it was really creative and intresting. (im not that good at reviews, just compliments...)