Published October 11, 2010
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I liked it a lot. It shows the actual struggles of an american teen mom and the father not wanting a part of it. It brings out who these people really are and what they really want.
Keep up the good work!
Charlotte Grace
Right, so.
I didn't feel anything. I want to feel the emotions in your characters. Describe the setting and your characters. I honestly want to feel everything thats going on.
Provide a backstory. How long have they been together, when did they meet? was it love at first sight?
Your grammar and spelling are good
Write On
~WickedWonder