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by lilactree
  • October 11, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter
  • Romantic

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CharlotteGrace
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CharlotteGrace commented · Mon Oct 11, 2010 7:39 pm

I liked it a lot. It shows the actual struggles of an american teen mom and the father not wanting a part of it. It brings out who these people really are and what they really want.


Keep up the good work!

Charlotte Grace

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wonderland
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wonderland wrote a review · Mon Oct 11, 2010 7:06 pm

Right, so.
I didn't feel anything. I want to feel the emotions in your characters. Describe the setting and your characters. I honestly want to feel everything thats going on.
Provide a backstory. How long have they been together, when did they meet? was it love at first sight?
Your grammar and spelling are good

Write On
~WickedWonder



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