The Strongest She Can Be

by kristenailene50878
  • April 13, 2011
  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

We all know her.
That girl.
The one who hides her face,
even after you've seen her tears.
She smiles and jokes,
even though her make-up's smeared.
She tries her darndest,
to be her strongest.
After all, that's all she can be.
You know that girl?
Yeah, she's me.

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HessicaJolt
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HessicaJolt commented · Thu Apr 14, 2011 12:26 am

This definitely looks like it came from the heart. I absolutely love it. Its beautiful, even though short. Great job!

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sapphirewednesday
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sapphirewednesday commented · Wed Apr 13, 2011 11:42 pm

wow! i love it. i really can't suggest much else!

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ohhellothere
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ohhellothere commented · Wed Apr 13, 2011 11:38 pm

Aw, I like this very much!

It's got a very nice rhythm to it, despite the shortness. I like the rhyming - it doesn't seemed forced at all, and it really makes the poem flow well.

Good work!

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jaustenFan18 commented · Wed Apr 13, 2011 9:58 pm

I agree. Very nice ;)

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Soulkana
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Soulkana commented · Wed Apr 13, 2011 9:09 pm

Very compelling even if its short...but its not about the length is it? I can clearly see myself in this piece and fell in love with it...good descriptions and wording. Keep up the good work ^^ Good luck and Happy Writing!!!!!!!
Soulkana<3



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