London Bridge

Hey, my poem "London Bridge" is about war. It also includes the theme of love in it. I wrote it in a realistic way, and even emotional, so the readers will enjoy reading it. It is about a person who met her lover and lost him during war. If you haven't read it, I suggest that you read it, and give me your feedback.

Kristina

Heyy thanks for the comments!! I really appreciate and thankyou as well for your advices. I will keep in mind not to forget punctuation in the future.

This is a very nice poem! This is one of the first poems about the London Bridge. You may want to start thinking about your punctuation. Most of the time there is just a full and sudden stop, it would be wise to think about it in the future. In some parts the words are simple, and like Matthew said, don't quite give this poem justice.

I am a new player and poet/writer, so forgive me if my review is not sufficient.

You are doing well. Keep it up!

~Rain

This was an interesting poem to read; I can't recall reading anything else about the London Bridge yet. It was a nice poem, and I liked the unique idea you had. Some punctuation was off, but still very good. It was the kind of simple and straight forward poem that I like to read when I come on the site. Good luck for future writing, great job!

Thanks for reading! Please give me your feedback!!
http://www.krissitimevault.webs.com