Hey Kris ^^ Shina here ;P I'll be your reviewer for today.
I'm going to go against what lin said about being more sympathetic towards those type of people, because I think the way you're sending this message out to them, and to people considering doing this, is the right way to go. With teens and kids these days, you can't talk to them with all sorts of sappy sentences and planned out guidebooks that'll 'help them' or whatever their parents think those therapists do.
More than anything, those kids want to be accepted. They want to other people to know they exist, and sometimes they'll aim for acceptance no matter what the cost. I'm not saying to not be sympathetic to these kids, but just not in this particular poem.
I can't say much about the grammar and punctation, mostly because I have to eat breakfast right now ><
But Alyssa is right. "no" should be "now" and the "mid(dle)" part is hard to understand when it's in here as poetry. If it were in the lyrics section I think it would've been understood more.
-Shina
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