Through the green grass the wind blows,
it stops and I'll never know why.
I'm with a friend from my imagination,
he knows what I mean when I say 'the world in between the tree and me.'
A tall oak with a moss covered body,
bends with thee and me.
Oh how I love the tree and the tree loves me!
I am glad to have met the tree in my imagination.
The only place where I can be, just the tree and me.
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Hey there. So this is my first review, hopefully it won't be so bad and you'll like it. I like your poem because it's about trees.
Trees are awesome! But I think you could show more in your poem, you just tell a lot of stuff. For example you should show us what the tree looks like. And why is this tree any more important than other trees? The tree is your friend but you don't really talk about it a whole lot in this poem, so I think if you wrote more about you and the tree and why the tree is important this would be a better poem.
But I still think it's cool you wrote a poem about a tree being your friend. More people should have trees for friends.
Alright, this poem was a bit all over the place. It could be improved upon. I didn't like the flow or imagery. I don't believe it had any imagery except the first and third stanza. Perhaps it was because it was so short but I didn't feel satisfied with it after reading it.
I like the idea of it but I think it could be made better.
Keep Writing, Anger.
I thought that this was an interesting poem.
Is the tree in the tree the friend form your imagination ?or Is your imaginary friend between you and the tree?That is the one part I found confusing. I think you could have a better opening line because it seems like it has nothing to do with the poem. Hopefully my review helps you. Fiction