Published June 17, 2010
Let us write a melody and sing it together in song,
Let us move to a new beat and then dance along.
We shall write a sonnet an ode to good fortune,
All of us shall write a beautiful love poem,
and we all will laugh in tune.
-M.H. Darling
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what first got me to read this was your title, no offense but i was let down.
you could do a lot better.
Sorry
M.H.Darling sounded like an author I knew!
No, I wrote this by myself. (: I do not copy others, I think it is a bit trashy.
If this is not yours... I dont advise you post it on here. It is not your own work. Thus, its note really allowed.
Unless it is yours, then tell me and I will aplogize for being stupid. XD
Im not actually sure where you'd post other peoples reviews... :/
This is not a poem you read everyday, I found a message about peace and living in harmony in it.
In the first two lines, the rhyme seems effortless, but the rhythm seems a little off.
In the second set of lines, I think the first line should be broken into two. It flows better.
Keep writing!