Romeo
I c u every morning at my front door
U smile at me and say u look beautiful today
Ur everything to me, im everything to you
Were just so perfect, were just so rite, well make it through the darkest light
You’re my shining star the bright and only one, hero in my life
Your everything to me your just the perfect thing for me
Romeo
Were walkin along the beach hand in hand
U look at me with those brown eyes and smile that crooked smile u no I like
Were just so perfect, were just so rite, well make it through the darkest light
You’re my shining star the bright and only one, hero in my life
Your everything to me your just the perfect thing for me
Romeo
I like that way ur not like those other jerks
I like the way u pay attention to me when im hurt
And u say babe r u ok
Were just so perfect, were just so rite, well make it through the darkest light
You’re my shining star the bright and only one, hero in my life
Your everything to me your just the perfect thing for me
Romeo
U look at me I look at u
U say babe I love u
Then I.. faint
You’re my shining star the bright and only one, hero in my life
Your everything to me your just the perfect thing for me
Romeo
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Why, hello thar. I'm Light_Devil and I shall be your reviewer today.
Well, let's commence!
This is painful to read. Please, pretty please with cherries on top, DO NOT speak in chat-speak. Please.
Same for your chorus thing. No chat-speak.
Don't forget punctuation, as well. It's a must in poetry.
All comments, that I made above, here again.
Okay. Same thing here. Also, this has to be the best part of your poem.
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I don't mean to be harsh, but never use chat-speak. Please. I'm sad to say, this has been done to death; not by you, but by the general population. The whole "Perfect us, love you and you love me too" thing is so average and streamline-normal. The repetitiveness of this also grates on my nerves. This piece has very little emotion to it, but there is some and they are base emotions, so I suppose you succeed in that, at least. Good work.
Hoped this helped.
Have A Nice Day,
Azrael.