Published July 25, 2011
i always whisper to my self a cheering words i look in the mirror and what i think about is how to keep the faith? how to have faith in tommorrow while you are already afraid of it.life is risque it's like a climb but the vue is great ,so keep climbing eaven if u go back try to back on the top again !
i kept climbing cause i knew that in some day i'll get the result for shure.i kept climbing till the top till the end but the only thing i saw was i wasn't seeing at all. was it real, was i blind or just life was getting darker ,turning off all the light on my face .
i look in the mirror and i see a hall different person that says some people are on the top but others like you will always stay climbers and hopers and dreamers but i fight that voice and i say who i'm not to be brilliant gorgeaus talented ? actually who are you not to be !! cause we were send to earth for a purpise we were send to earth for a reasen and we have to no we must achieve that! we must found our goals our aims and hopes we were send to earth to make mistakes and never do them again we must learn from our mistakes eaven that we have to pay hard for them but sometimes it’s ok not to be ok. we were born to make a diffrence . don’t give up on the things you love and you really care about . I’m saying this not because I see people in pain but cuz I m one of those people who lost control on their misreble pointless life but look I ‘ve found my ambition , my future , my dream and I ‘ve got my life back . you shouldn’t be funny , beautiful , genius to be lovable you just have to be you .no matter what makes you unperfect no matter what people says about the fact that you’re not perfect or you’re not good enough to describe perfaction , in that exact moment when people frustrate you and bring you down with words and moments when you’re in pain in these kind of moments you should realize that someday and sometime in a surtin place you are gonna be huge .
people’s hatered to you prooves one single fact which is you are successful enough to make others ‘s jalousy grows when your success does.
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This piece is filled with truth! There are alot of spelling and grammer mistakes but who cares - you wrote an amazing piece that I thoroughly enjoyed reading - thank you
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i (I) always whisper to my self a cheering words (cheering words) i (I) look in the mirror and what i (I) think about is how to keep the faith? how to have faith in tommorrow (tomorrow) while you are already afraid of it.life (it. Life) is risque it's like a climb but the vue (view) is great ,so keep climbing eaven (even) if u go back try to back on the top again !
i (I) kept climbing cause i (I) knew that in some day i'll get the result for shure.i (sure. I) kept climbing till the top till the end but the only thing i (I) saw was i (I) wasn't seeing at all. was Was it real, was i (I) blind or just life was getting darker ,turning off all the light on my face .
i (I) look in the mirror and i (I) see a hall different person that says some people are on the top but others like you will always stay climbers and hopers and dreamers but i (I) fight that voice and i (I) say who i'm (I'm) not to be brilliant gorgeaustalented ? actually (talented? Actually) who are you not to be !! cause (be!! Cause') we were send to earth for a purpise (purpose) we were send to earth for a reasen (reason) and we have to no we must achieve that! we (We) must found our goals our aims and hopes we were send to earth to make mistakes and never do them again we must learn from our mistakes eaven that we have to pay hard for them but sometimes it’s ok not to be ok. we (We) were born to make a differnce . don't (difference. Don't) give up on the things you love and you really care about . I'm (about. I'm) saying this not because I see people in pain but cuz (because) I m (I'm) one of those people who lost control on their misereble (miserable) pointless life but look I ' ve (I've) found my ambition , my future , my dream and I ' ve (I've) got my life back . you (back. You) shouldn’t be funny , beautiful , genius to be lovable you just have to be you .no (you. No) matter what makes you unperfect (imperfect) no matter what people says about the fact that you’re not perfect or you’re not good enough to describe perfaction , in (perfection, in) that exact moment when people frustrate you and bring you down with words and moments when you’re in pain in these kind of moments you should realize that someday and sometime in a surtin (certain) place you are gonna (going to) be huge . (huge.)
people's (People's) hatered (hatred) to you prooves (proves) one single fact which is you are successful enough to make others 's (other's) jalousy (jealousy) grows when your success does.
Make sure to always re-read your work. Make sure that everything is spelled correctly and that punctuation's are suppose to be where they're suppose to be. Make sure that your sentences make sense. I would also recommend that you put your poetry in a different formation and not so close together. Also make sure you use CAPITALIZATION! I suggest that you rewrite this poem, so that people can understand it.
Other than those mistakes, I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.
There were lots of noticeable spelling and grammar errors, but other than those I really loved this. It spoke truth and understanding of what girls and boys think of everyday. And also what they know. I really loved this!!!