I start over
With you.
We ran once
But lost course soon.
On different paths,
I still keep eye.
You leave and
Come back — I
I still need you.
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This is amazing. I don't usually like to read love anything, but this is something amazing. It touches my heart, and even makes me reflect on my own friendships. I think you should continue writing things in this area. Just because you seem very connected with what you write...as if it even comes from your heart. Thanks for letting me see it.
This poem has a lot of potential. I like how it's only in a sort of diary of journal form. The vocabulary is awesome and the way you laid out the words is great. But, I want more. I was left with nothing really to create my own story with. Are you continuing this, or is this just a one-shot?
Love the poem, but I want more. Great work!
-Ryleigh
Nope, it's one of those 2AM one-shots.
I really enjoyed this! Great work!
This is a common theme in romantic poetry, a relatable love poem about going back to someone you once loved. I see that happen a lot in life, and I do it myself. My favorite line is,
"On different paths,
I still keep eye.", I really like that, kind of reminds me of what happen with me and my boyfriend previously. This is nice and short like those poems you see on tumblr.
I didn't see any spelling mistakes, or punctuation.
Good job, keep writing!
- Phoenix
Tumblr poem! I'm laughing/crying. I'm so flattered!