You have been through hell, with both of your parents gone
I'm not going to say I know how you feel, but I know you feel alone
Even though your friends and family are always here for you
I know that you want both of your parents there to see how your doing in life
and to tell you the right things to do
There's no need to want to be dead
Don't think about putting a bullet through your head
Straight up you are a cool person that stays true
Everybody feels the pain that you are going through
Feel all the comfort in the world, because we will always be there
God's not making you suffer I know he hears your prayer
It's not your time to go yet, he's not ready for you to come home
Just remember you don't have to face this world alone
Stay strong for your family, be a true man that you are
I know you will succeed and you will make it far
Yes your friend is right, write down all your thoughts and what you feel
To family and friends, your feelings may reveal
Love you Dionte hoped you liked the poem, just made for you
The end, so you better always stay true
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First, welcome to YWS! And yes, make sure you post at least TWO reviews before posting any of your work.
Second...back to the poem...
I understand that this poem is dedicated to your friend's parents' death. But what makes this poem so special is that it seems to speak from the heart of someone who cares very much for a particular person. That is what makes it a great poem, written straight from the heart. You must be a very good friend indeed ^^.
Well...this is all I can say. It is a great poem. After reading it, I can feel a sort of a special aura around the poem...its just...genuine. There are some glitches of course, but it can be improved ^^
Hope this helped. Sorry about your friend.
Lil_Pau