Kidnapped

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How did this happen? I shook my head, unable to comprehend what had happened to me. My brain felt all fuzzy and distant. Nice description I couldn't concentrate on anything. Every time a thought came into my mind, my head began to throb and pound until the thought was gone. I tried lifting my arms to find the knots that bound my arms to the table were incredibly tight. My hands were all tingly, I was sure the blood was getting cut off. The same thing greeted me when I tried to lift my legs. My feet had fallen asleep and the rope that held me was biting into my skin painfully. The blindfold over my eyes prevented me from seeing where I was and what time of day it was. The rag in my mouth rendered helpless from screaming for help. I could taste the rust from the old rag as i struggled not to gag. It was too big for me to spit out and i started to hyperventilate feeling like i wasn't getting enough air. I didn't know where I was or even if my family knew I was missing. I knew only two things. First, my day with my boyfriend has ended with a shot and me being knocked unconscious. Second, the person who has kidnapped me, is my best friend Oooh cliff hanger

Really loved this and I think you should definately turn it into a novel... it's really good! Keep on writing!

Ok, this is great for a draft. The only thing thats wrong with It is the fact that you dont really set a background, you do however make the reader feel pulled In. With a few changes on the grammer and background setting this could really come to shape. Keep up!

Personally, I loved it! It was a hooker from the begining. I would love to see this as a novel. Of course I do agree with the errors pointed out but with a little editing It would make a great novel. I wish you the best of luck and remind you to please reveiw my own works.

There i edited it a little bit

its great id love to do your reviewing for you and be your editor so if you would send me your drafts before you post them so i can look at them
-dragons

I like it actually. I think that you should add a little more description. Make me feel her fear and confusion. Make me feel like I'm also being gagged. Sorry I don't have much time for a full reply, but I like this!

Hey there! The name's Irish and I shall review for you!

Now this is really short, so I can't do that well of a review, but I can tell you what stuck out at me. Ya? Ya.

I shook my head, unable to comprehend what had happened to me.

I tried lifting my arms to find the knots that bound me arms to the table were incredibly tight.

The blindfold over my eyes prevented my from seeing where I was and what time of day it was.

The gag in my mouth rendered helpless from screaming for help

Second, the person who has kidnapped me, was my best friend