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Hi,
I was initially attracted to your poem because of the title and the poem was exactly how I thought it would be. I interpreted it as a conflict that a parent feels, some parents criticise, control their children's upbringing which is often misinterpreted as abuse (like me, my dad was particularly critical of me when I was younger) but parents do it out of love for their child. They believe that by criticising they are doing what is best for their child.
I especially love the conclusion as I found it relatable to my life.
Just a little comment I didn't find the repetition particularly effective of the same word :
'save (x3) yourself,' 'it is (x3) your own,' and 'do not (x3) let her take your life' I think it would sound less monotonous if you used the words once :
Do not let her take your life.
Save yourself.
It is your own.
I think the white spaces where the reader pauses between the lines is enough to make it dramatic and imply self realisation.
Thank you so much for the review!
I'm glad that you were able to relate to this poem, and I hope things are going well for you!
Thank you also for the comment on the repetition. I was trying to communicate the idea that the repetition of such phrases eventually became meaningless and twisted in a way that ended up in.. well, the end of the poem.
But I realize now how it can be interpreted in a different way, and I'll keep your comment in mind when I write other poems later!
Thank you so much again!
Hey! Grace here for the review.
So first of all, on the matter of titles... All I could think of when I read this one was the mother from the children's show "Daniel Tiger's Neighborhood."
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As you might guess, this influenced my thought process through the rest of the poem.
I would suggest finding something different, but that's just me... sorry.
Another technical thing: you can get away without capitalizing every letter that's at the beginning of a line.
The use of "words" again here didn't do much for me, considering you used it in the previous stanza. It felt out of place, since the other two were new ideas but not the third. But maybe that's how you wanted it.
Love this.
When I read the last line, I had to read it a couple times before I got it. I love that part. Don't change it, it's awesome.
I really don't have much else to say. I liked this poem a lot!
Keep writing!
-Grace
Thank you so much for the review!
And the title "Tiger Mom" refers to the name of parents or, more specifically, mothers who are often overprotective and highly critical of their children. I'm sorry about the confusion, haha.
And I agree with the use of "words" -- I cringed a little when I rewrote it. Thank you again!