Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;
I wander through the city, my head echoing with the memories of what used to be. Up ahead, the remains of the kingdom's castle covers the ground. I walk closer and stand over the remains of the castle. I look down at it, a slight twinge of guilt filling my chest. I didn't want to do this, but I had to. I needed to. They all hurt me. They punished me for things I couldn't control. I couldn't be who they wanted me to be, so I covered the kingdom in bright, wicked flames.
Ooooh well this is quite the little tale. I wonder if you're intending for that to fully stand on its own there or maybe you've got a little bit more in store there because also has some real hints of a prologue to it there too. I feel like it could have a lot of potential. I mean for something that is quite this short you really manage to pack quite a lot within it I think and it really speaks out to us showcasing all the hardships that our protagonist here has had to endure through all of this time and what's brought here to this tipping point.
I think you do a great job bringing that out to life here. Keeping it in this short form really makes it feel quite punchy and you can just tell straight from this person's emotions just how badly they've been wronged and how low of a place they've fallen to before of course it would seem quite a lot of chaos was unleashed there. It seems like you gone with the idea of them being a villain but honestly I'm also getting perhaps something of an anti hero vibe from it too.
Either way, a fun little piece I think. It really presents a rather exciting prospect here I think!
Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!
As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!
Stay Safe and Have a Nice Day!
Kate
Kate
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