Hello,
I enjoy this poem a lot, the title is what caught my eye. I was interested to see where you would go with a title like that. Though, I must say, this is a bit confusing at first, for me anyway, but I really like the idea and theme you were trying to capture here. The details really gave a good image, and I could picture it all in my head, which I love in any kind of writing.
"The yelling of words
The sobs of anger
A crash,a crack"
That was the best line by far, just the opening. I think it really captures the reader and makes them want to read on, also its great because I feel like I can see and hear what is going on, which I love.
Great job
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