I really enjoyed this - the style is fittingly abstract and to the point. Well done.
I did have a bit of the problem with the line "from every point that i proved." What are you trying to say here? It reads rather awkwardly, and I'm not sure what it's trying to convey, so you might want to tweak that line a bit. Also, I'm not sure about the use of the ellipses either. Part of me thinks they work, but the punctuation nazi in me is screaming in agony XD
Overall a lovely piece, though. I'll look forward to reading some more of your work.
Cheers,
~bubbles
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