Shadows of the Night

This was a really good poem and I am going to tell you what to do better with each stanza.
First: "' Do you see the falling snow? As pure and innocent as light, Contrasting with the feasting crows - A game of black and white."'
This was a really good way of setting it up because it sounds so good and wants you to keep reading and want's you to find out what happens to the snowflake.
Second: "' The winter takes it's frozen breath, The snowflake lightly dance Ans fall and fall towards their death As if they were in a trance."' This is when I would say that you would have to keep going and when I read this twice I really liked everything about it and it made me think a little about life.
Third: "' The time has stopped it's silent walk, The wind is passed by, They two are having speechless talk In shadows of the night."' This was the part where it would just continue and it is one of the parts of the poem that sounds good but you really don't need.
Fourth: "'Among the crows I raise my eyes Towards the falling snow. In winter's dream in black and white Do I too have a role"' This is where I really would put this toward reality because everything that you said right here is what is going on in my life right now. I ask the question ever day do I have a role and never here a answer.
Finally: "'Today - a falling speck of light? A crow in world of frost? But one is sure - in spectrum fights The shadows win the most."' This was a really good way to finish the poem because I really like the way you putted it together and finished it strong.
This was PusheenTheCat and I hope that you keep on writing and in the future I hope to see you again with more reviews.

Rhymes Rhymes Rhymes!!! Oh god I love it when a poem incorporates rhymes. I'm so terrible at it but it aids the poem's flow in the absolute best way. But I digress let me give you some coherent feedback. XD

You open up the poem with a beautiful image, the black crows on white snow. It sets the immediate tone of peaceful observation, from the very first stanza I'm drawn into this feeling of stillness. Then immediately after, you give winter a little personification, which I love. I imagine the way my breath looks in the cold, except I imagine that the chilly wind is winter taking those cloudy breaths. Which of course makes my mind wander in imagining a person who is utterly at peace with the cold despite how it makes other people shiver.

Then of course you bring in time as another being, and the idea of time and winter being a silent couple is absolutely beautiful. I always thought a silent conversation equated to a dance, which then leads to me imagining winter and time in a slow dance in the silence. And now I feel like I ship it. Gosh I love this poem.

On a somber note, I do appreciate the introspective focus in the last two stanzas. In all this grandeur of time seeming to stop and winter creating this breathless scene, there's you standing amidst it all thinking hey, maybe I'm not just watching this happen, I'm part of it happening. It's a beautiful poem and to be honest a wonderful change from the usually extremely sad poetry I'm used to. Not that there's anything wrong with sad poetry it just tends to be that way, poetry is expression and what needs expressed more than sadness or joy?

I really love this poem, thank you so much for taking the time to write it. I can't even think of any criticism, I just love the whole thing. Keep writing!

Hello,

How you have your poem set up in nice with the four lines per stands and the length between lines is nice as well. Your word choice is great and you flow is steady. Your theme is wonderful too, and you keep enough of the deeper meaning away from the read so that they can come up with it on their own. This poem is prefect for winter and gives the feel of taking a walk during a snow fall in hopes to clear you mind. Love it. Truly beautiful.

Happy Writing!

-M.