Jin Uchiha:
Clan: Uchiha
Parents: Deceased
Brother: itachi, sasuke
Blood: AB
Bloody Midnight
I awake to a darkend night as death was all around and know one was in sight. I begin to freeze as if my bones where froze yet i couldn't move because when i looked up i saw true fear...it was my brother was a sword comming near. i begin to run,run, and run but when i turned around the death slaughter had begun. I screamed in fear as the people i knew then started to disappear. He struck like hell in the night and killed everyone in sight. I ran and ran screaming for my life trying desperitly to reach my parents befor they lost their life. A few minutes later i reached their room. I knocked and i peeped in as they where both on their knee;s thats when I rushed in and said "please brother please!" he then swung his sword cutting off their heads forcing to watch both my parents fall there dead. I fell over on the floor crying my heart sorrow out in pain holding on to nothing to gain. As i begin to realize I surely would die I looked at him tears of blood..." why brother why.....why did they all have to die?!!" my brother then replied they where weak. and thats all i'll speak now run little brother run..for my destruction has just began" I a came up to a knee... looking at him with blood in my eyes after today i had realized that he was pure evil...full of deceat but after today i will show him defeat..i ran to him striking a blood with one move i was kicked trough the floor... I layed in blood drowning in pain losing my life with nothing to gain.
sasuke's story summed up in poem i guess post and reply if you wish to hear the rest
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I think I'll move this to Other Fiction, because poetry is more often than note in verse....and this is more like Fiction.
This is not lyric, nor is it poetry. In fact, I'd shudder to call it literature, the punctuation, spelling, and grammar is awful. Which leads me to ask... what are you thinking?
I'll review this after you answer that question. Meanwhile...
o.o ehidunno -> e.e. cummings (heh)