ey there, jemming17! Sofie here with a review.

Firstly, I want to commend you on picking a topic as important and timely as this one. I think the number one biggest indicator of whether an essay is effective or “good” is whether it tells the reader something new or not. That is; does it teach the reader something new or is it just spitting back common knowledge that the reader most-likely already knows? Because, if you’re doing the later then you’re wasting the readers time. Pro-tip from an English major; if you can teach your teacher something, even just a little fact, that they might not have previously known your guarantee yourself a good grade.
So, with that being said; Does your essay teach the reader something new? I would say somewhat. I didn’t know this was the leading cause of death for generation Z. Honestly, I would have guessed auto-accidents were. However, a lot of what you mention about anti-depressants and screening is common knowledge. The prevention portion was pretty superficial. You might want to expand your research, maybe look up more personal stories of rehab or families who have lost loved ones to suicide so that the essay feels more than just someone reciting facts and statistics. Also, this is not proper MLA or APA format, so if you’re planning on submitting this as is, I’d suggest double checking your teacher’s formatting standards before turning this in. (If not, then just ignore that last part XD)
Good luck!

Hey there, jemming17! Sofie here with a review.

Firstly, I want to commend you on picking a topic as important and timely as this one. I think the number one biggest indicator of whether an essay is effective or “good” is whether it tells the reader something new or not. That is; does it teach the reader something new or is it just spitting back common knowledge that the reader most-likely already knows? Because, if you’re doing the later then you’re wasting the readers time. Pro-tip from an English major; if you can teach your teacher something, even just a little fact, that they might not have previously known you can guarantee yourself a good grade.

So, with that being said; Does your essay teach the reader something new? I would say somewhat. I didn’t know this was the leading cause of death for generation Z. Honestly, I would have guessed auto-accidents were. However, a lot of what you mention about anti-depressants and screening is common knowledge. The prevention portion was pretty superficial. You might want to expand your research, maybe look up more personal stories of rehab or families who have lost loved ones to suicide so that the essay feels more than just someone reciting facts and statistics. Also, this is not proper MLA or APA format, so if you’re planning on submitting this as is, I’d suggest double checking your teacher’s formatting standards before turning this in. (If not, then just ignore that last part XD)
Good luck!

Hi there Jemming17. Even though this is already knocked out of the Green Room I felt the urge to go ahead and review this. Let's begin.

The title doesn't work for two different reasons. First of all, there's a clickbait-y tone that comes with 'Generation Z's Biggest Problem' and using a demographic cohort in a title in that way may scare readers away from the more important issue that you're attempting to talk about because most articles that do use a term such as 'Millennials' or 'Generation Z' are usually...not that great of quality. My second problem with the title is that it's a little misleading.

What I mean by this is that there's no mention of the main focus of the article in the title, and that's a little misleading? If anything of this sort I'd prefer the title to be 'Generation Z's Biggest Problem: Suicide (or Teen Suicide)' as adding in the part about suicide also acts as a trigger warning for those who may not want to read about the subject. If not that, it'd be nice if you added a trigger warning into the description of the work to prevent harm to anybody uncomfortable reading about the subject.

Moving on from the title, let's talk about the structure and construction of this article/essay. I'm quite confused by why this isn't written in the format of an argumentative essay, especially when fits well with what you're attempting to do and the message you want to get across to readers? This work is arguing that Generation Z's biggest problem is teen suicide and there are different points being argued throughout so why isn't this an argumentative essay? The structure's fairly simple with an introductory paragraph, two body paragraphs, the rebuttal and a conclusion.

As for the current anatomy of this essay--there doesn't seem to be a lot of thought put into the form? Furthermore, there's not a lot of substance in each point being made, either. The 'Works Cited' at the end takes up more space than your final point 'Effects of Suicide' which I found to be a little ridiculous. There are six works cited but there's not a lot of sourcing in the work? Instead of quoting by using quotation marks, footnotes are used and I'm unsure as to why. None of the points here are properly supported, either. For example, the introduction's only three short sentences and the thesis statement isn't all that strong.

Add an attention-getting opening and spice that first paragraph up with background information about the subject--this makes the body paragraphs able to focus on the most important points instead of the majority of the work talking about information that the reader may already be aware of such as the three-stage screening--that's not unique. What is unique is the author's perspective on all of this. I have to say that I'm heavily not a fan of the section titled 'Is Suicide Exaggerated?' due to the lack of sensitivity similar to @Junel. I also liked the idea stated about adding in a list of suicide hotlines if only to give examples on your part.

Try to learn the signs, because someone you love could be next if you don’t.

Hey there! This is definitely an important topic and you provide a lot of information for the reader.

First my nitpicks and suggestions:
(I bold what needs to be changed)

Imagine you losing someone to suicide

It is also the leading cause of suicides.

memory loss,difficulty with concentrating,

How To Stop Depression There are many things

The first idea is used in the United States mostly and teaches students

The second idea helps mostly people like guidance counselors learn to identify people at risk and help them with connections to get help.

IS SUICIDE EXAGGERATED?

After someone has lost someone to suicide

Hi there! I'm not great at introductions so let's hop right in!
I just wanna say that this is a great little article you've written here! I've dealt with suicidal thoughts and still learned a few things.
I just have one, teeny tiny nitpick. It's not that big a deal, just a suggestion to make this article even better than it already is.
You mentioned suicide hotlines, but what I would do is include just a few of those hotlines after the references, for example:
Suicide Prevention Hotline 1-800-827-7571
Eating Disorders Awareness and Prevention 1-800-931-2237
Gay and Lesbian National Hotline 1-888-843-4564
National Domestic Violence Hotline 1-800-799-SAFE
Stuff like that.
Anyway, I really like this article! It's informative and it doesn't sugarcoat anything, thanks for writing!
-Trashcan