Published September 14, 2011
This is so predictable,
and this is so cliché.
But you need to know that you make me feel this way.
I’m slowly going crazy,
your sweet talking is making me blush.
I don’t think this is just a crush.
I can’t get your smile out of my head,
or your laugh out of my ears.
Your happiness chases away all my fears.
I hope you feel the same way,
and I want you to get a clue.
I think I’m falling for you.
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I like the title and the first two lines. I also like Florence.
I think you need to strengthen it up, douse it with a little imagery. I'm not sure if this conforms to the rules of a certain vein of poetry that restricts syllables or lines? If not stretch it out a little and fill it with imagery. I say anyway!
Edit: then again it is lyrical.
Awww... I like the title of your poem, The Predictable Poem. Very original, since many poems are like that. I like how you make the second and third line rhyme in each stanza rather than doing a AB AB rhyme scheme. Nice work.