to love is just a delay before pain
in time you lose them or they get away
and yet we take this risk with fear in are hearts and fear in are soul
always prepared to pay the toll
Hey, Alice is here to give a short review!!!!First of all, welcome to young writer's society (YWS), hope you jave a great time here! You look heartbroken, cause it needs a lot of emotions to write such poems. It's short and powerful. The flow is nice too. My favorite line is this-
Good morning, afternoon, evening, night, or whatever it is in your current daydream! Ouch, it sounds like somebody broke your heart. Well, you’re getting revenge, writing about them for all to read! I love the way this flows, it reads very well! I appreciate the rhyme at the end, I enjoy the rhythm it gives. I read this very dramatically in my head, like a Shakespearean play. Did you write it wearing a cape and pearls? The message is sad but powerful. I’m ALMOST second guessing getting married in the future, but not quite. It makes me question, am I prepared to pay the toll? Thank you for this wonderful writing piece! Keep up the good work, I’m excited to read some more! Good bye, adios, arrivederci, au revoir, sayonara, you know, whatever language you prefer!
Great job! I really liked this
i hope you guys like it!!!!
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