This really resonated with me, as I've written many poems about the amount of medications I'm on as well. It really is such a touchy subject as just thinking about it evokes emotion in me. But I really liked the poem and made me feel not so alone.
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This really resonated with me, as I've written many poems about the amount of medications I'm on as well. It really is such a touchy subject as just thinking about it evokes emotion in me. But I really liked the poem and made me feel not so alone.
Despite the many colored capsules there is a sad note to this. I imagine the pills and what this person must go through, hope seeming so far away. This was very touching in a different sort of way than most other touching stories, and sadly it is true for a lot of people. Also how you brought back a line said in the beginning, really nice touch. Well done.
Hi jackolantern! Being on my own med cocktail, I can sort-of relate to this. You also have some good imagery, such as comparing them to grains of rice.
I think where this could use improvement is in the description of the disease itself. There's some hints at psychiatric symptoms in the beginning, but when you say this:
When we catch on to something, and see a little improvement,
I get excited.
When six or eight weeks are up,
I go back to her, and we taper off it,
And go on to something else,
Hey I absolutely love this poem - the simplistic language makes it so much more real. One of my favorite lines is
"My favorites are the little white ones./They remind me of grains of rice."
I also really like how you start in medias res; it draws you straight into the poem.
I don't really have any criticism, I really related to this piece and really enjoyed your writing, I can't wait to read more!
Have I mentioned I love you lately? This poem's so emotional (probably because I know most of the story behind it) <3
That is really good. Is this based off of personal experiance?
Btw, i know nothing about poetry.
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