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I actually came back here because I was curious about the title, #1439 . What is the significance? It piques my curiosity.
I absolutely love this poem. It uncovers the terrible truth that plagues so many young lives -- I have felt exactly this way and I can guarantee many of my friends have as well. It perfectly describes what its like to not be suicidal in a moment, but generally not want to live, yet living anyway for the sake of those around you.It acknowledges every thought one should have and every thought one shouldn't, but still has anyway. The formatting was a bit confusing to me, but I still enjoyed the poem.The ending was perfect as well. An almost bittersweet ending where the narrator does not find happiness but rather a simple conclusion they already knew from the start: One that does not solve their feelings but rather redirects them as something that should be brushed to the side for the greater good, even if that "good" cannot be felt.
EverLight here with a review. This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned- you may feel offended anywayFirst ImpressionThis made me cry. This seriously made me cry. I'm glad to have found another poet that's for certain. This was beautiful.Nitpicks & GrammarYour good hereStyle & FlowJust one thing-when you say-and there are so many beings who would kill to be in my position, I would remove the and, and the word beings so it would read more like this-
And there are so many who would kill to be in my position
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