Rain
The Rain Falls
Causing False Tears
To Roll Down My Face
These Tears May Be False
But Some Truth Is In Them
I Look Around At The Sky Filled
With Big Dark Gray Clouds Rolling
In All Different Directions The Sun Cannot
Be Seen Behind Them But Maybe Hopefully And Needfully
In A Few Days Time The Sun Will Come Out And Bring Back
The Glorious Sunny Days With The Missed Cool Breezes That
I have Been Looking For For Months For Week For Days Wanting Them
Since The Beginning
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The Rain Falls
Causing False Tears - ... eh...
To Roll Down My Face
These Tears May Be False
But Some Truth Is In Them
I Look Around At The Sky Filled
With Big Dark Gray Clouds Rolling
In All Different Directions The Sun Cannot
Be Seen Behind Them But Maybe Hopefully And Needfully - needfully? uh, no
In A Few Days Time The Sun Will Come Out And Bring Back
The Glorious Sunny Days With The Missed Cool Breezes That
I have Been Looking For For Months For Week For Days Wanting Them
Since The Beginning
Okay. This poem is not as good as you think it is. Well, the first half anyway. What Matt said. Capitalizing every word was annoying, because its improper grammer. Which is annoying, because your grammer is so good
Again, "false tears that have truth in them". eh. it sounds like you were trying to hard to be poetic.
KEEP WRITING!!!!
I didn't find much wrong with this beyond what Matt already said. It just really irked me that every word was capitalized. I wouldn't do that unless it was from some specific reason, which this doesn't seem to have. Welcome to the YWS though! Keep writing!
~Yoyo
I like this. I don't like how you capitalized every word, but I like the format, which seems to resemble rain falling. A comma or two here and there wouldn't go amiss, however. The second half, I really liked. The first half...didn't sound so good, somehow. I would suggest a slight rewording, but don't change the format - it works really well. Keep writing!