Being crippled by the coldness of their gaze,
Her body quivers
Their words become a blaze
A thousand tears, like crystals leaves her eyes
A thousand comments- harsh and brute,
smothers her desparate crys
and out the door she runs to hide,
to give up on caring,
living terrified, when
her mothers words runs through her mind
from the night before
her voice so gentle- so kind
leaves an everlasting impression like many others
"You are capable of overcoming the hurdles you face
so stand tall with all your grace
because you my dear, you are a tower
claire you are my neon flower."
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i liked how you told the story and how it became to be but to tell you the truth it didnt look like you put any time into it. what im trying to say is that it was good but i think that it could have been better in a way.
it was pretty decent keep writing and you'll get there
thnks alot
pretty good topic theme
I really like this !