The only place I deserve to be is with death ,in the loving arms of the one person who`ll never let you go .The perfect being.How can the one thing that ends the pain be the cause of so much?
Each day I ponder the thought of joining her, joining the shadows. Each day I watch the sun rise the rain fall and the sky darken, and each day I step closer to her arms. I can feel her embrace, the sense of release ,the sense safety .The eternal break from the shouts and the taunts, and the voices.
The voices they’re so loud, they never sleep they never rest. Every second of every minute they are with me;I can never escape, trapped in the cage of my own mind.
It was all their fault that I’m here, that I’m locked away treated like an animal. I’m not human anymore,I merely co-exist with the normal ones. I`m the freak of nature no one wanted, the boy who got picked last because he was too busy trying to tell the voices in his head to be quiet;the boy who would be picked on because the voices told him to do the wrong thing.
But the voices are me, I made them, I brought them to life .Make them stop, I hear them, I can always hear them.
And then I imagine the silence, the silence I would I have if I went to her ,if I joined her she’s the only one who cantell the voices to be quiet, the only one who can press the mute button.
I can’t stand it anymore her call gets louder each day ,all I have to do is jump and she`ll catch me, we can be together, I’m ready for the silence, I’m ready for everything t stop. It’s time for me to go to her, to leave a world that hates me. Catch me my love.
Philip George Stratford
1991-2010
Beloved brother and son.
May he be alone with the silence?
All that remained was his notebook .Inside there were letters, he`d written himself;letters to `her’. We can only hope he found the woman he loved.
My Love
I write to you to ask for you to bring me peace, make the noise stop, please make the voices stop they shout at me ,they tease me, they hate me I know they do.
They wont leave me alone my love, I try to sleep but they won’t let me, they scream at me they shout at me.
What did I do wrong? Save me please. I DON’T WANT TO DO THIS ANYMORE. Come and find me ,I`m waiting for you I don`t want the noise.Make it stop
My love, come for me.
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Viv here.
Wow, that was intense. It was great and kind of painful, the letter was impactful and really tied the story together, kudos. So I'll just point out a few grammatical errors or give tips.
1. "The only place I deserve to be is with death ,in the loving arms of the one person who'll never let you go ." (No space between word and punctuation the comma and period). Also, are you sure "You" is the right word, I thought Philip would refer to himself?
2. "that I'm locked away treated like an animal. I'm no longer human,I merely co-exist..."
Add "and" between away and treated and a space between the comma and I. Also, ouch, was he sent to prison or an asylum? That was a strong line.
Alright, I'm done with that up there. The story was great, as @Transport22 said it was creepy and that was good since I think that's what you were going for. If not it worked. Have fun with your next story and maybe post it.
Later~
Thank you really appreciate it!!!xxx
Quite creepy! That could make an epic novel! Imagine a world were you can hear the voice of your one true love. Or maybe only one person can hear the voices like the story you wrote there.
I love the concept.
when I read it I felt as if i knew the poor boy very well. I felt as if I was there and I were him.
The way you wrote it was quite poetic and thoughtful even though you say it took 20 minutes it felt like it had been planned.
All in all I love your voice through him and it works so well!
Never stop writing...
Oh one more thing!
"It was all their fault that I’m here, that I’m locked away treated like an animal. I’m not human anymore,I merely co-exist with the normal ones. I`m the freak of nature no one wanted, the boy who got picked last because he was too busy trying to tell the voices in his head to be quiet;the boy who would be picked on because the voices told him to do the wrong thing."
This paragraph makes me think of my younger self when I had an imaginary friend called 'the blue wolf' who would help me when i was scared but i also used to blame stuff that went wrong on him.
Thanks for the amazing writing!
Aw thank you so much !!
I didn't expect such good feedback x