indigochild1991 wrote:What is this place? This isn't my home. This isn't where I grew up, and went to school...it couldn't be. I don't believe in Hell, but if there was a Hell, this is it. I'm in Hell. Along with so many others....along with those children, those poor maimed children, who's(whose) cries echo through the ashy air, crying for their future....crying for tomorrow.
Working as a nurse in this hospital is like an endless totrure, working to heal the children that the soldiers violated with their bombs and guns and tanks. They call us villains. They call us bad, evil people who must be exterminated. How could we be the villains? Hoe(How) can they call us villains while they destroy schools filled with tiny pupils(no comma) who's(whose) mothers lie in the streets over their baby's bodies. How can we be the bad guys?
Iraq wasn't always like this. We were never perfect, but we got by. Children went to school and were safe. Now so many of them lie maimed, or worse(,) in the beds of this very hospital. My heart aches(no comma) and the tears spill when I see their tiny bodies, often missing limbs, with faces barely recognisable. I cry in anger...why? That's what I don't understand. Why is this happening? Why are we judged like this? I mean(NC) I'm just a twenty year old girl(NC) with hopes and dreams and a life...but when so many hear that I'm Iraqui, they hate me. Hatred over what? I'm a good person.
It's normal here now to hear a blast here and there. To see another builiding go up in smoke(NC) and to see tanks smash through the town. The tanks are owned by the soldiers who won't let medical supplies through, so the people in the hospitals die. They just die. We can't save them.
Before I leave the hospital on my break, I check up on little Aaliyah. She's in here because her school was bombed, but she and a few others survibed(survived). Now, though, she's missing her left arm, and has severe burns on her face and chest. I touch the little girl's hand, and close my eyes, holding back the tears.
I leave the hospital now, venturing out into the war zone that is my home. Soot and dust fill the air, and houses that once stood proud lie in ashes. The sky is painted red with the blood of the slaughtered Iraquis. I stand alone, in the dark, dreary pits of Hell.
Indigo, I have no words... I am awed, speechless. This was really beautiful. Seeing the other side of the story is really eye-opener. The idea of this is so true, and the honesty of this piece just makes it even more real. It seems to me you use understatements since the situation is actually worse than you can put into words. I understand that. You're like the holocaust writer Elise Wiesel. He speaks through the silence between his words. Your writing seems to have darkness hidden between the lines also. I caught a few spelling and convention errors, but other than that, amazing. Keep writing! I'll definitely come back for more
~Shina
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