Snoink is right - you should try to add a little more power to you poem. It's a really great poem, the concept is awesome, however, you really shouldn't be afraid to just totally get out there - after all, being a writer is like being in control of your own personal insane asylum, right? I think that's a quote from some guy or other, I forget who, and can't remember where I read it... anywho!
Sorry, this isn't really much of a review, but I LOVED your poem - the concept was what attracted me to it, like Snoink.
See ya around!
~Claery
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