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I think my favorite part about this poem was the last stanza, where you started talking about (specifically!) what you would miss from summer. That shows us, specifically, who you are and gives us an idea of your character using substantial imagery... always a good thing! I think the stanzas before it mostly contain personality and no substance... if that makes sense. So go for a style that's more like the last stanza, I think. It's beautiful!
If you have any questions, PM me. I have to go to class (eek, late!) so I have to leave. But I did like your poem. Ahh, the horrors of school!
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