Young Writers Society

Hey there! Eli here to review your lovely work.

It really hit me like a blast, I expect the poem to be about how to become a real human and how to go through emotions and maybe through hard times in life. I did not expect such a meaning in your work but that does not change the fact that it thrilled me with a lots of feelings. And it was still in the 'human' category of works. I usually dislike longer poems as they just look like too long vertical snakes who go down my open window but this one really had a meaning to it so I do not mind it so much.

The work starts beautifully by opening our eyes and letting us be again a child who is so happy and only happy, they feel no fear for the world, not knowing how it can hurt their poor beings. It is the sweet nature of the youngful creature that is the kid and you show us that with positive atmosphere and only good memories, plays and many more! Games and fun!

But the most important thing in this work is the way you show us the other side of the coin as well, the one we flip to when we grow up and meet up with the cruel world that was so nice and sweet to us while we were younger. And how realistic this work is makes me happy and sad at the same time.

Young kids who just try to be themselves, grow up to be out of the box of expectations of their parents or whoever around them, and they get totally rejected. Being called 'ugly'. By society as well.

It is a very touching work that was also a great read.

Keep on writing!

Dear, iamanaspiringwriter,

I'm new to the yws community, and you are officially the first person I have made a review for, and frankly, I'm impressed.

I really enjoyed the fact that you metaphorically connected children to flowers, because they are very delicate, but they are very beautiful in the sense that they have no fear and no sadness, right?

I really enjoy how you wrote the poem, how in the beginning you set a very delightful "frolicking through a field" kind of picture through imagery. I actually could see a beautiful flower in my mind and it slowly began to shrivel throughout reading the poem.

I also enjoy the theme of the poem. It's something I have recently become interested in, about the image society sets for people about how we should be, and if we do not fill that image, we are not enough for the world, we are "monsters" as you said.

I honestly enjoyed this poem so much. It didn't rhyme, no, but I find free verse poems more creative and imaginative since you aren't limited to a small amount of words. I definitely rate this poem with five stars.

Please keep writing works like this, and I'll be sure to keep my eye out for your username!

Sincerely, BaileyMatwiiw.

Hello, hello, gxldencrxwns here for a review.

This is one of the best poems I've ever read. The long length makes it more appealing and the theme behind it is heartbreaking. Great job on taking a topic such as this and handling it so well in this poem.

But I would suggest, since this is a poem, to make the words and sentences rhyme where they need to. There's nothing wrong with writing poems without rhyming but it is a poem, right? I guess that hypocritical of me to bash of people who don't rhyme in their poems when I don't either, huh. But do what you want on that part.

Overall, I enjoyed this. You handled the topic greatly, I didn't see no grammar and spelling mistakes, but I would probably say make sure your next poems rhymes (not saying you have to, though).

Keep writing, you sure do have talent!
~Gxldencrxwns