Hey there! Eli here to review your lovely work.
It really hit me like a blast, I expect the poem to be about how to become a real human and how to go through emotions and maybe through hard times in life. I did not expect such a meaning in your work but that does not change the fact that it thrilled me with a lots of feelings. And it was still in the 'human' category of works. I usually dislike longer poems as they just look like too long vertical snakes who go down my open window but this one really had a meaning to it so I do not mind it so much.
The work starts beautifully by opening our eyes and letting us be again a child who is so happy and only happy, they feel no fear for the world, not knowing how it can hurt their poor beings. It is the sweet nature of the youngful creature that is the kid and you show us that with positive atmosphere and only good memories, plays and many more! Games and fun!
But the most important thing in this work is the way you show us the other side of the coin as well, the one we flip to when we grow up and meet up with the cruel world that was so nice and sweet to us while we were younger. And how realistic this work is makes me happy and sad at the same time.
Young kids who just try to be themselves, grow up to be out of the box of expectations of their parents or whoever around them, and they get totally rejected. Being called 'ugly'. By society as well.
It is a very touching work that was also a great read.
Keep on writing!
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