Hey there! joallover here for a review on this wonderful Review Day for team Mazarine Marauders!
I have to ask, what is up with all the break up/ just plain sad poems in the romance section? I skipped over a lot of them. I liked yours though, so I decided to review. I loved the content and the way you expressed your feelings.
One complaint I did have, though, was the beginning. I had to, sort of, adjust to the poem.
"I’m not the same girl, you once
Knew.
I no longer obey all the rules.
I rebel against you due to hurt."
When you place 'knew' down there in another line, I find it is almost as though you are losing a line. To me, it is hard to read like that.
Other than that, you did great. I thoroughly enjoyed the expressive atmosphere in this. Keep calm and keep writing!
Peace Love and Fahrvergnugen!
-joallover
Points: 214
Reviews: 67
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