Published May 9, 2010
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TO THE MOTHER OF MINE
WANT TO LET YOU KNOW, YOU'RE LOVED ALL THE TIME
MOM, YOU'RE MY MOMMY AND I LOVE YOU
LET ME TRY TO SAY ALL THE THINGS YOU DO
FIRST, YOU GAVE BIRTH TO ME
IM NOT SURE, BUT THAT CANT BE EASY
YOU TENDED FOR ME, FED ME, CLOTHED AND RAISED ME
YOU MADE ME THE BEST PERSON I CAN EVER BE
ALL MY LIFE, IN THE RIGHT WAY YOU GUIDED AND LED
YOU ALWAYS BACKED ME UP, NO MATTER WHAT IVE DONE OR SAID
MOM, YOU WERE ALWAYS THERE FOR ME, IN EVERY WAY
ALWAYS KNOWING WHAT TO DO AND SAY
YOU ALWAYS SHOWED ME ATTENTION AND LOVE
BEING AT MY SIDE LIKE A LOYAL DOVE
YOU ARE THE ONE WHO ALWAYS WANTS MY BEST
WATCHING OUT FOR ME, ABOVE THE REST
MOM, YOU GIVE ME BLESSINGS AT EVERY STAGE
YOU MAKE THINGS EASIER AND CLEARER, WHEN IT HAD LOOKED LIKE A HARD MAZE
MOM, YOU GIVE ME THE BEST ADVICE ALWAYS
TO YOU I'LL LISTEN TO ALL MY DAYS
THE LIST CAN GO ON AND ON, NEVER ENDING
BUT WONT FIT ON THIS EMAIL IM SENDING
I LOVE YOU MOM,
IN EVERY WAY
EVERY DAY
ALL THE WAY
MOMMY, YOU'RE THE BEST MOM THERE IS!
HAPPY MOTHER'S DAY:)
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Hello there!
So I see, you're a new member so... Welcome to YWS!
First of all, you surprised me by this all "CAPS" style though, it would be really, really better if it wasn't all in capital letters. If you post a poem like this be sure it's your own original literary work.
Third, I willingly want to give a comment on this or a review, perhaps.
You don't have to basically state "You're my mommy" 'cause there was the word "Mom" before it.
Like this line.
As with your rhyming, it was good. You really have to work on your apostrophes. You changed tenses and there were some awkward sentences. And please remember that all letters should not be capitalized.
Keep up!
Peace out!
_Yuri_
Mod: Sorry Yuri, edited for specific reasons.
How sweet!