Hey, hexglass! It's ScytheMeister here for a quick review.
First of all, the layout was unique but in no way at all discouraging. I found that it matched the nature of the poem. Disorganised and modern, it was amazing. Great Job!
In regards to criticism, I really failed to understand the meaning overall being the poem-- or rather, why you chose to associate food with the meaning. At the end, you do state
the heat digests me
so the association of food is clearly the introduction to the use of "digest" but again, I fail to see how digestion links into "heat". Perhaps it is just my poetry-deprived mind that fails to understand its ways (I apologise for that lack of experience).
Although, I did very much enjoy the last line, where you included
I embrace the mouth it hungers with
It was an amazing climax for the poem, her/him accepting the situation.
Great work!
Keep writing! <3
- ScytheMeister
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