fun fact this is real life like the me age.... is real things that happened to me
what did i do to get here
is the thought that lingers
do i even deserve this
i look back, at the me's long gone
me age 3, finding who I was who was even me
me age 5, learning the world and trying to thrive
me age 7, wishing I was in heaven
me age 9, saying I was fine
me age 11, trying to drop a friend
and all the me's in between
wandering
aim
less
ly
through the mind
i look back at them and wonder
would they understand
where we are now
where i am
some days, i feel they'd be proud
others, i feel they'd look back with disgust
i look back at the me's in my mind
they'd be proud no matter what
as each year passes
a new me lingers
a new part of me
a new sensation
i miss them
but would i still be where i am
so i ask myself once more
what did i do to get here
fun fact this is real life like the me age.... is real things that happened to me
Cupid here, I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Hi again Tea!! thought I'd go ahead and fly over a review, let's get to it!!
Top Graham Cracker: - First Impression!
When I first took a glace at your poem, I was immediately drawn in! you have such a reflective introspective tone that immediately had me hooked. The repetition of "me age" creates a sense of progression and growth throughout the piece. It's intriguing and got me curious to know more about the speaker's journey.
Toasted, Slightly Burned Marshmallow: - Room for Improvements!
I did notice that you said "mes" instead of "mess" I saw it twice throughout the poem, so I'm not sure if that was intentional or a typo? Another thing is, the structure of the poem could be a little more refined to improve the flow and pacing. Other then those few nit-picks you're all good!!
Melty Hershey's Chocolate: - Highlights of the Piece!
The strongest aspect of your poem lies in its introspection and self-reflection. The recurring theme of questioning and wondering about the different versions of oneself creates a true sense contemplation. The lines "some days, I feel they'd be proud, I feel they'd look back with disgust" evoke a large range of emotions for me and it really demonstrates the complexity of your/they're journey. The repetition of "I look" also adds a thoughtful and introspective quality to the poem.
Perfectly Toasted marshmallow: - Favorite lines!
- "as each year passes, a new me lingers" -
Hey, Tea! <3 Ley here to review this wonderful piece by you!
Firstly, let me just say, I love reading your poetry. I look forward to it whenever I go to review. :3First impressions...
I feel like this was the perfect growing of age poem. It's relatable, and most people would resonate with this piece more than you think! I enjoyed the format as well. When I was reading this I felt...
Nostalgic, curious. When reading this, I reflected back on my own life. And wondered-- how did I get here? It also had a subtle sad theme to it, as if the narrator's acquaintances don't like the new version of them. Even though this can happen in life, a part of growing and evolving is maturing into the new you every once and a while. There's nothing wrong with that! My favorite line/quote is...
I have two favorites!
wandering
aim
less
ly
so i ask myself once more
what did i do to get here
Other than that, I couldn't find anything majorly wrong with this poem. I did notice that you would say 'mes' instead of 'mess' but you did it twice, so I'm not sure if that was intentional as well? It may have been. If it was, ignore that! 
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