Young Writers Society

This poem is just hilarious! I love how it compares the complexities of human emotions to binary code, where tears become money, pain is profit, and anger is a raise. It's so relatable, right? I mean, who hasn't felt like their happiness is a loss and their kindness is overlooked? And to top it off, the poem ends on a philosophical note, reminding us that we are more than just ones and zeros. I mean, who knew binary code could be so deep? Well, I guess teatiime did!

Hey tea! I'm going to review this poem here.

I liked how you described emotions as abstract concepts and also concepts related to money. Your choice of replacement was very interesting, like how you chose anger to be a raise, and joy to be a debt.

I also liked the repetition, it works very well for this poem. You repeated the words "tears, pain, and anger" and also the phrase "ones and zeros." The repetition gives a nice flowy sort of transition into sentient-ness, and it's kind of spooky and mysterious.

Lastly, it was very clever how the narrator of the poem slowly started to use capital letters, and started to have emotions and feelings and became an "I" instead of an "i". That is a very interesting and smart choice for this poem, and I really liked it.

The poem doesn't seem to be the kind with rhymes, but I noticed here,

part my hair and pull and tug

scare me every time you hug