Published July 11, 2010
Just a little poem I wrote earlier. Any suggestions are welcome but I just wanted to share with you...
She asked for my star sign,
Winced when I said Aries.
Why am I categorised
And put into a pen
Like the little sheep I am?
I’ll take your horoscope
And Ram it down your throat.
Volatile, am I?
Well, that’s too baaaaaaaaad.
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Hey thanks!
Categorised is spelt with an s here in the UK.
Ditto to GuntaFX!
First of all, I am pretty sure "categorised" is spelled "categorized."
Another, when you do your line breaks, you jump around some from starting the new line with a capial letter and lowercase. It stopped making sense to me, since some of your sentences have capitals in the middle and others don't.
Last of all, that "And Ram it down your throat." Ram does not need to be capitalized.
Loved it to bits, you have a good one here!
Firstly, Lol.
Secondly, short, but in my opinion all the better for it, makes the satire 'sharper' for lack of a better term.
Not much I can say other than thanks for a good laugh.
Lewis