Published February 18, 2005
Can you please tell me in what order the Hourglass stories are sopposed to be in?????
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I think it was great. Your description is very good, and the story is interesting. I think i spotted a few typos, but it could just be me.
{rubs eyes to get rid of the sleep clouding them}
The same person is talking.
That's why.
Tis very good. The only problem is that after someone speaks you take a new line!
WHEE!!!
sorry. ha ha.
But what parts did you think were too descriptive?
I really enjoyed reading this, very descriptive. I really like the way you did this at the end:
"so
very
nice..."
It sort of shows how their driffting off.
But you told me to critque so here it is:
I know this sound weird but it was almost like you put to MUCH description in some parts but that was O.K
This is the best Hourglass that you've posted so far!!! I love it!!! post more!!! write more!!!!
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