Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...that was quite a story there....definitely carries a very powerful message in there...well...looks like a love story gone..very very bad there...sadly that applies to reality a little too well sometimes...oh well...me reacting to all of this in more detail down below.
Anyway let's get right to it,
I kept thinking to myself what if it didn’t have to be this way, yet I forget that hope doesn’t exist for me anymore. The word love, it once felt warm between my lips, but now… now it was something vicious, nothing but a bitter hate that boiled within me, ready to melt my flesh and bones. What love meant to you, is no longer in my dictionary. Saying the word now penetrates my tongue with a venomous disgust, its toxic fumes rise and pierce my eyes, leaving them to drown. What love is to you is nothing but a filthy lie to me.
Oh wow...we are starting things off with quite a bang here. Some very powerful words being used there right at the very start to get things started...oh dear...well..it certainly does its job really well as a first paragraph and gets our attention straightaway.
Nor this: window
Nor this: dagger
Have you ever heard of a story, a story about a window that was cracked by it’s own will? Well this window was pure, and innocent, once clean from the sins of the world.
Well...that question cannot possibly lead to a very nice story...that much I can tell...haven't heard of such a story though..
This window was clean until she opened up and saw you. You revealed to her love, You revealed to her hope, and exposed her feelings that she could no longer conceal. You cradled her within your wings, obscuring your face within a mask, whispering nothing but repulsive lies. Yet, she believed you. Months had passed, and you adored her, loved her, lusted her, missed her, needed her, wanted her, possessed her, trapped her, abused her, raped her, hated her, destroyed her. It wasn’t enough it was never enough, so you pulled off the mask showing your true face. Your dagger pierced her with threats, you enjoyed the taste of her and pain, you enjoyed watching her tears ooze down and crack the glass. You killed her.
Oh dear...gosh..I am lost for words for there....that escalated ridiculously fast there...you have no time to react to what that's throwing right at your face...phew....well...you definitely get the point across there...things go very, very bad....and yeah...let's stick with that...some really powerful words there...
Love is the name that stains all victim’s lips. It intoxicates you, adores you, then betrays you. It sinks it’s blades into our hearts. “Victims aren't we all.”
Well...that's a very dark note to end a story on...oof...
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall I think that's well...quite a powerful little story...not too much else to comment here...so yeah...I think that's about all I gotta say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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