Published April 17, 2012
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Very nicely done Hayley! I loved this poem and would love to review more of your works, just get in touch with me alright?
It’s taking me over,
Now, anything in bold are mistake like spelling and such, anything in italics are simply my thoughts on a line that may or may not need to be there etc..
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Blanketing my being.
Wrapping its tender arms around my lungs,
Caressing my heart,
Whispering to my soul.
Sweet nothings not meant to be repeated.
Its arms embrace me gently,
Holding me in its warm, tender grasp,
Never letting go, never giving up, always holding on.
It’s all that I breathe, all that I want, all that I crave.
The affection overwhelms me, taking me over.
My actions, my words, my life has all changed through the embrace holding me in, keeping me alive.
Flaws, mistakes, impurities, nothing matters.
Everything, everyone disappears.
My body warms, my hands shake, butterflies cannot be tamed, and the realization hits.
I love you.
NHNT
Sounds like a plan! I hate it when it decided to ignore the time I put into my reviews. It happens to me often. -.-
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH I wrote a massive reply and it deleted the entire damn thing! This is frustrating. One second Hayley I'll get back to you on this