Published February 6, 2009
The confusion is taking me but I don’t know why
I keep trying but you keep pushing me away
What the hell is wrong with you
Can’t you see what you’re giving up
I tried to talk but it just won’t work
No, nothing will unless you’re willing to listen
Why has caused you to do this to your friends
Why do you keep pushing us away
I tried to talk but you won’t listen
I tried to go but you just walked away
I wanna help you out with your problems
I just wanna be your friend again
You’re like a broken flower
A beautiful thing dying
When will you learn that you’re not always alone
It’s hard to believe but it’s true
The world may change but I’ll still be the same
We’ll all still be here to go to your side
I tried to talk but you won’t listen
I tried to go but you just walked away
I wanna help you out with your problems
I just wanna be your friend again
You’re like a broken flower
A beautiful thing dying
I hope some day you learn that it’s better
To face your problems then trying to run away
It’s a hard lesson to learn but you will
Until then I guess I’ll just keep trying
I tried to talk but you won’t listen
I tried to go but you just walked away
I wanna help you out with your problems
I just wanna be your friend again
You’re like a broken flower
A beautiful thing dying
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Agreed with all those posted above. This topic is quite cliched, and some punctuation is needed for more flow. However, you are very into your work and have the heart and soul of a writer. You placed your being into this work, and that is enough to cover up the cliche and punctuation. Very heart-felt and emotional (It's the first thing on this site that has made me cry...). :_(
I Liked it, some actual puncuation would have been nice. And added more flow. It was good, really, the idea of it seemed kind of Cliche, but it made sense. It had feeling too, you could tell that you actuall cared about it, and that it wasn't pointless. Also, it was kind of repetative, I could defenitly tell what the chorus was. But even so it was good. Not to repetative.
its fine, just think a little deeper next time you read anything i write
I read your message. So I want to apologize, I guess I didn't get the lyrics.
To be honest I didn't like this song. It was okay.... You need to add punctuation to show the mood of the song. I also was hoping to see more rhyming + This topic is getting so old for me.
Lot of you people just can't stop writing that you loved someone but they left you.
I have commented millions songs like this especially on this week.
Jesus I am getting tired of this. I recommend for you to write something different.
But don't be hard on your self, I am just expressing my opinion. This song isn't that bad. But I think you need to change the topic.