They always said she could be something big,
And then they took it right back by spitting in her face and breaking her down
They always told her to hold her chin up and she'd never fall.
Well they lied on that, along with everything else
She always was a little bitter
Holding onto everything that went wrong.
She always seemed a little bitter
Always giving up to soon and now....
She cant help but feel
That shes on the outside(oh oh oh)
Alone and broken
astraned from everyone else
Maybe if she picked herself up she would find.
That shes not on the outside.
He walked a bit slower then everyone else.
Holding onto what could've been
If he'd let go and look it all then maybe....just maybe
he wouldnt have fallen
He always was a little bitter
Holding onto everything that went wrong.
He always seemed a little bitter
Always giving up to soon and now..
he cant help but feel
That hes on the outside(oh oh oh)
Alone and broken
astraned from everyone else
Maybe if he picked himself up he would find.
That hes not on the outside.
It took time
but baby they found each other
It tool a while
but honey their greater
together then they were alone....
And Now
They no longer feel
like they're on the outside
Alone and broken
Astraned from everyone else
They picked each other up and now they found
Oh now they found.
now they found that they're.....
not on the outside.
not-not on the outside
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Hey dove! I like the words a lot. I like how it's a cliche "boy meets girl" scenario but you made it different. The down side of reviewing lyrics is that you can't hear the music. I would have liked to know how the song played out. Even though it is a song, grammar still counts. Just remember to use apostrophes in contractions. Look over the third stnza for three incorrect contractions. You also need to add in periods and other punctuation marks. Well done overall!
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This poem was amazing! So heartfelt and beautiful!
Keep on writing, you're a great writer
-WGirl
I read this poem, and then I saw your age...WOW. If your writing like this at 15...Who knows what you will be doing in the future?! Only time will tell, but I can see that you will only get better and better, and by that rate your poetry will be presented to millions. All the best to you