Verse 1:
everytime i tried to walk away
you always had something to say
pushing me out the door
only pulling me back in for more
Its a shame that i fell for it again
refusing to break but i will bend
chorus:
And now that your gone
it feels like its been so long
but im better off now
yeah im better off now
verse 2:
You only wanted me to be there
because you knew id care
I no longer fear of being alone
iv'e accepted the fact that im on my own
chorus:
And now that your gone
it feels like its been so long
but im better off now
yeah im better off now
verse 3
So now i say goodbye
Letting what i felt for you free
I had to let it die
Now your just a memory
song end
i know its short and it has a lack of vocab i just made it in like 5 minutes haha but ya tell me what u think of it for the little bit of it that there is.
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I no longer fear of being alone
That's one grammar mistake. It should be, "I no longer fear being alone". It's okay I don't think it will ruin the melody of the song if you change it. On the summary, it was nice lyrics and I think it came straight from the heart but if I had to play in on my guitar I don't think it will sound spectacular (especially if this is an an acoustic song). It's a bit short and I think it's barely a minute or less. Try adding more words and improving the flow a little.