Published September 21, 2009
Hi here is a story I wrote about the tv show Supernatural. I was interested in the dynamics between the two main characters and so decided (for my own amusement) to write a story about Sam and Dean Winchester. Hope you enjoy and tell me what you think of it, any improvements etc. Thanks heaps! A.
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Thanks guys for your comments! Yeah I have that problem too when I can add just a little too much detail - something i definitely need to work on
And you're right about Dean needing to be more laid back in that section. I'll change what I can from everyones critique - and thanks again
this phrase should be changed, maybe to
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Why did he say that?
He's really getting moe nagry than necessary- Dean's pretty chill, especially since this seems to be set in an earlier setting than the current tension on the show.
Overall, this is interesting- keep me updated as it continues! However, I would lay back a bit on the intense detail, it's a bit over the top. I remember once being told the same thing about my story- the uber details get good marks with teachers, but really aren't that necessary. Let me know when the next part is up!
Wow! I really loved that! Well I love anything supernatural so that may explain it...but that's not the point! You really made the characters how I expected them to be and totally added the two brothers humor that I adore! I'm really excited for this! Keep writing and tell me every time you post a new one! Haha keep me updated!