Young Writers Society

Hi Foxmaster! Been a while.

Right off the bat I wanted to ask if this is the character your profile was based on or vice versa.
I was really excited to get to know more about you (or the persona you've created).

This is definitely a cool intro and I'd love to know more. I really liked the description of Cennetial sounding like a kind of lettuce. It totally does.

I also liked how we get a few key details about her. Her affinity for children and dislike/past experience with, spiders.

One quick spelling correction. In the last paragraph 'found' has an extra 'r' in it.

Overall I am excited to start reading your stories again, I have a lot to catch up on. I do hope you continue with this one (especially if it is connected to your profile).

TELL ME MORE

That is what first entered my mind when I read this lol

The first two lines never fail to make me laugh despite how others may see it as cliche. It can work as a comedic opening and one that holds suspense. I wonder indeed what the origin of the legendary Foxmaster.

Well, hello Morrigan Simmons.

I also checked the word “cennetial” and it was spelled wrongly. Whether this was intentional or not, I find that amusing. And also I learned a new word! Centennial! Yayyy

Oh yeah it does sound like lettuce. I could already imagine the definition of it. Anyways HAHAHHA

Normal life then…? I wonder what is next.

Overall, this is a great introduction!! Cannot wait for more

This is alpacaboss, signing off.

Hello, foxmaster!
I'm here to leave a review here. I have to say I was a little disappointed to find that this was so short. I was just getting interested, and then, the end came, but that does really leave me on the note that I want to know more. So, you may very well find me reading the next part of this if you release it.

I love the humor with the lettuce. I actually really agree with that. That does sound like a type of lettuce! That, and the bit about the spiders. Yep. Life's great when there are no spiders around. I agree.

I do have a quick suggestion for you. Capitalize "Simmons." This is part of Morrigan's name and should be capitalized. Other than, that, nice job of getting me hooked right away! *Thumbs up*
-Kaia