Published November 23, 2005
How do you describe
with words
things beyond beauty and grace?
Is there nothing I can say
that will show you what I speak of?
"So beautiful!" you will cry
but I will not understand.
"White whispers of majesty" you breath
but I still do not see.
It is simply indescribable,
too lovely to put into words.
And I wish you could share in my joy.
But you cannot;
Words are not enough.
Disgusted that I can't describe what I see out my window.
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Hmm.. Not bad actually
You use good imagary and such, and it tends to have a good flow, although sometimes this is out of whack and tends to just... stumble along? If you understand what I mean.
Your punctuation in some places is a little strange and you don't use enough in other places - try to vary from the everyday comma and period, it makes the poem seem easier and more enjoyabke to read, because you can create suspense with different pauses in different places.
Hope this helps.
I can definitely relate. Like it a lot.
it's awesome! too bad it's mostly gone now. happy turkey day!
I can't believe you knew what I was talking about, yoha!!! I freaked out when I saw it this morning but couldn't find words that were worthy of it.
Oh well. Hey- I got this. (sorry about sp error)
cool poem, i love it. i love the pretty snow too. doesnt it make you happy?
Kind of ironic, since poetry is supposed to be the antidote for the Inadequacy Thesis (that is, that words are not enough to describe everything) and yet ... maybe that was the point of this? Anyway, I liked.
"Undescribeable" should be "indescribable".
nice poem, good flow....kind of depressing but then again it isn't. I liked it. Check out some of my poems if you'd like.