This was great, maybe you should do some stuff like what the others said, oooh you should send this to someone famous, just a suggestion, it would be pretty cool. 
Just Keep Dreamin’ On
Verse 1- Songs written in a notebook
Bein’ teased by girls tryin to be cool
Sitten’ home alone on a Friday night
Wishin’ that my life could change
Chorus- Dream on when the water floods
Never let em get the best of you
Keep dreamin’ and make em come true
Just keep dreamin’ that’s all you have to do
Verse 2- Boys breakin’ your heart
Don’t ever let em get the best of you
They say you aren’t pretty or cool
But we girls know, boys like to drool!
Chorus- Dream on when the water floods
Never let em get the best of you
Keep dreamin’ and make em come true
Just keep dreamin’ that’s all you have to do
Hook- Keep dreamin on
They won’t get to you
If you believe, believe
In your dreams
Chorus- Dream on when the water floods
Never let em get the best of you
Keep dreamin’ and make em come true
Just keep dreamin’ that’s all you have to do
Ending: Songs written in a notebook
Boys breakin your heart
Dream on when the water floods
Just keep dreamin on
This was great, maybe you should do some stuff like what the others said, oooh you should send this to someone famous, just a suggestion, it would be pretty cool.
I enjoyed this very much. The concept is nice and sweet. You had a good flow and rhythm to your words. Good job. I do have one suggestion though. I feel that you should make your lyrics longer. Maybe add some more into the chorus. Maybe about finally getting that boy you like to talk to you or something like that. Besides that I feel that this has a lot of potential. Great job!
I like everything but these two lines.
fireflight61 wrote:They say you aren’t pretty or cool
But we girls know, boys like to drool!
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