Hello, Dino here for a short review!
I feel like this topic is used quite often but you seem to use it in your own way, if that makes sense. Like, the title you have used is kind of deceiving but also shows a bit of symbolism with the white rose because I think of it like life or something of the sort. Also, a little bit of Alice in Wonderland. I also like your beginning because of how you used your definition of death to appeal to what you are writing. However, you seem to use such a topic that it seems kind of repetitive throughout the whole thing. Personally, I enjoyed most of the messages you were trying to show throughout this whole piece, as well.
Such is the way of the world. Such is the nature of time. Such is the nature of life and of death, of light and darkness, of new beginnings and of ends, of creation and of destruction.
This little chunk feels a bit repetitive because you seem to be saying the same stuff over and over again. Perhaps just have:
Such is the way of the world. Such is the nature of time and life then death.
Personally, this seems more of an easier read to understand without having the same thing repeated but in different forms because 'life and death' is kind of similar to 'of creation and of destruction'.
Overall, I did enjoy this little piece. It had a nice meaning towards death and you used good examples that, in a sense, were cliche. However, you used them to show a point about death and I think that's a good way of doing it.
If you have any questions, let me know!
Dino
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